heat of her body rising through satin

the moon spreads light on virgin snow

8 Responses

  1. A very unexpected juxtaposition, James. I like it, but I had to struggle a bit to make it work for me. I think I struggled because, as a scientist, I expected the phenomenon of “melting” to be in here somewhere.

    • Thank you, Ann! I was aiming for a feeling of warmth-by-contrast, and trying to establish associations between whiteness and perhaps different sorts of virginity.

      • Okay, I think I get it now. You are talking about the spread of passion as represented by light.

      • Yes! I did have that in mind. My reading of the poem isn’t the only one, or even the best, but I’m pleased to see that you picked up on that. As I’ve said, I was also going for a feeling of warmth by contrast.

  2. The longer I ponder this, the better I like it. Such fresh metaphors. A possible feature for my blog, perhaps?

    • If you’d like to mention it, I would be honored. I think renga, even tan renga like this, opens up great possibilities for meaning. It can be hard to read, though.

      • I usually don’t put pictures on my blog to illustrate short pieces, but in this case a tasteful scene of new snow might help.

      • If you’d like to couple the poem with a piece of artwork, you certainly may. It’s your blog, and you’ve always taken pains to make it visually appealing.

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